us

The wind wil make us dust....!

time will make us dust,
we must thus
not trust
those who use us

Author's Note

i just wrote this when i uploaded some of my photos =]

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Interesting bit of writing you have here.

[behind.the.lights]

hmm, short, but packs one helluva punch. Yeah, I think it could possibly use some expansion and has potential to create a real statement. I like the blunt edge of it. It's like a butter knife. Straight forward and dull-ly simple, but slices in the soft spots. Good write :)

[Jane Doe]

(: well obviously we can't trust them!:P
Nice little stanza Thingy!(:lol

Xooxxo
~inday/abbie
100/100

[DreyaArt]

truly spoken.
simple to the point,
well written.
cheers.

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

For such a short poem it really hits quite hard sending a clear message only the writings of a talented poet well done

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is simple yet, poignant... Time should not be taken for granted. We need not waste it on those who use and abuse our friendship...to make the best of Time with real friendships.

[Damac]

Wow, short but to the point. Nice job!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

wow this is awesome! i love this. Good job!! :))) mind checking out some of my work? thanks :)))

[Muse]

this is very cool. Despite the brevity, you remind the reader that it is urgent to make the best use of time and friends. No need for procrastination or fake relationships. We must value the moment, before it transpires to dust.j

[Stammers]

Ah. You lost me at 'thus'. I just hate archaic language when it kinda' doesn't need to be there. Seems insincere. Sorry. You said you wanted honest feedback in your personal status, so I thought I'd follow your orders.