The relationship between ladies on the beach and pigs that fly loose in the sky filled with clouds

Life is taking back its purpose

thousands of faces flash past me

hands suggesting me to go left; go wrong

trees of sin grow in the middle of the forest

roots barely beneath the ground

but you challenge authority, what a fool,

you look up to see pigs fly through

the sky disappear into nothing, nothing

sands of time fall down the neck of

hate, burning anger, hell looking back in my eyes

i came from the rib of adam

decaying moments, influences of a demon,

murder of the innocent, murder of the acquitted,

no one can stop this massacre,

by the ancient ladies on the beach

Author's Note

this is a utter surreal poem, free verse, so ignore the errors =]

Reviews

[Kat Collins]

Definitely thought-provoking. It's letting out the inner demon we all have inside us, but normally it's locked up tight. Reminds me of a murder on the beach, leaving a lost child, who grows up not knowing his family, and then is hunted down by rival families from his childhood past. It's the "ancient ladies" or matriarchs that are running the show. Excellent work.

[Blessed_Angel]

I like it good poem.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Wow very interesting thoughts going on in this write with a interesting impact. I really like this, I'm not sure which line to point out to my liking.

[EMF]

Surreal, yeah, and like all good work of that ilk it spins off a hundred different thoughts in my mind. The title alone is worth a few pound of anyone's money.

[Jeremy Baker]

Intriguing ...

[CHRIS ANDES]

a perfect free verse...

[Jane Doe]

It's horrible to think a's freest a's you are you didn't discover this talent of yours sooner don't worry if you don't like it, a's an author myself I usually don't like my pieces.

Xoxo
~abbie
100/100

[stars are far]

well ...good one ..

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I don't get it, but it's really well penned.
=]

[Luke Ritta]

love surreal poem...and this one amazing poem......stunning title as well.