Yet You Smile

Yet You Smile

A Poem by ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))

Your face change, change into someone I don't recognize,
Eyes gleam red, like the fire in the pitch black night.
Blue skies open, as the wind blows the clouds away,
Like your face, that changes with the flick of a switch,
Towers of trees stand on the vast plains of your hand,
Sharp ended sticks, the blood drops down from what you hold,
Why does it seem always so dark beneath your eyes,
"God I know, I know I am a sinner, but,"
I fall to my knees in front of you, my hands on the ground by your feet,
I struggle to breathe as my body falls to the ground,
Yet you seem to smile,
My last prayer lays on the ground with you, standing on it.

© 2011 ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))


Author's Note

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Wow That is really good. I liked it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very nice poem, nicely detailed with emotion.

Possible correction:
changes, changes
"Your face change, change into someone I don't recognize, "


Posted 12 Years Ago


it flowed within me!!..

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great emotion in this one.
Keep spillin'
I'm listening and you are becoming
LOUD and Clear!!!!
Can't wait for more...

Posted 13 Years Ago


Definitely a powerful read. I loved it.
The description in this poem is wonderful.

Posted 13 Years Ago


The way you describe this woman before you is quite brilliant and your plea to god makes this feel so sincere. In the end this was quite suprising because you forced so much emotion and passion into this that the reader feels overwhelmed. Very well written.

Posted 13 Years Ago


At first glance this would seem to be as one of your reviewers put it a love or ode to your beliefs. But it seems upon further examination to use a metaphor here like you would be the ant under Gods magnifying glass here in this poem. Almost a poem of intimidation, It is well worded and written. Again you have a good mastery of the english language in structuring your poetry, so it does have a fluidity to it as well.
Collette

Posted 13 Years Ago


I loved this poem. The beautiful love sparkles throughout the whole poem! :)

~Lizzy~

Posted 13 Years Ago


Not bad at all.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I can notice the positive message you wrote about God!
:)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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