Broken Heart

I once was inlove...

the first time
I looked in your eyes,
I knew
knew from the start this would happen.
you take what you want
you brake the things
that I live for
to pleasure your
sick
sadistic
little game
of a broken love
a broken heart...

Author's Note

This is so far out of my prefered genre! Comment pleassse! Will buy you a cookie =D

Reviews

[Russe Salome]

Short poems are good to read. I think that there's a lot to be said about poets who can condense their feelings into just a few lines. And the anguish here is tangible. Just as a notes, there are a few incongruities with your punctuation and capitalization, so just look out for that I suppose. Just make sentences into verse.
Your tone is the thing I love most here, the cutting rage of it all, and I can really relate to that sharp stab of betrayal that's coming through here. Good job, I'm eager to see what comes next.

[J. J. Nightingale]

Short .. and right into the gut .. I feel the breaking, and the loss ..

Jasmine ..

[HeIsWe]

This is very good, I like it.

[Priscilla Sayers]

It was very vivid, those short lines were enough to get the feeling across. Good job. I want more.