Broken Heart

I once was inlove...

the first time
I looked in your eyes,
I knew
knew from the start this would happen.
you take what you want
you brake the things
that I live for
to pleasure your
sick
sadistic
little game
of a broken love
a broken heart...

Author's Note

This is so far out of my prefered genre! Comment pleassse! Will buy you a cookie =D

Reviews

[Russe Salome]

Short poems are good to read. I think that there's a lot to be said about poets who can condense their feelings into just a few lines. And the anguish here is tangible. Just as a notes, there are a few incongruities with your punctuation and capitalization, so just look out for that I suppose. Just make sentences into verse.
Your tone is the thing I love most here, the cutting rage of it all, and I can really relate to that sharp stab of betrayal that's coming through here. Good job, I'm eager to see what comes next.

[Meghan]

Nice. Good write. Thanks for sharing!

[The fallen of innocence]

The last six lines were awesome, and it somewhat reminds me of myself, though im not like that with my bf, keep writing

[Kenneth The Poet]

Not bad. Short and pointed, like a razor dipped in acid and ready for the strike of death.

[Scytheriax]

Brake should be Break
Other than that, I love this poem.
Reminds me of an ex of mine, to be honest haha
You can definitely feel the emotion in this poem.

[MmeCorpse]

...I want my cookie in the form of a sugar cookie. :D

Okay, so yeah. I love this... reminds me if my ex and his little "jar of hearts" he carried around. Very nice.

[Maryum Mazhar]

Beautiful man!
really, really something.
Loved it through out.
Keep it up!

[Sarah E. Pearson]

Amazing work. You were able to put so much feeling and emotion and meaning into so few words. Bravo.

[Nishant Gupta]

nice one read mine too "QUEST OF LIFE".

[Lily Mae]

Straight and to the point... Let it rip... Great expression..x