HATE!

HATE!

A Poem by ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))
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I feel this feeling

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tears roll down my face
from the pain
the pain that you caused
you hit me
with that thing
thing of yours!
the blood mix with my tears
and fall to the ground
never have I felt this feeling,
I look at you and see red
from all the rage
I feel it now
stronger than before
HATE

© 2011 ((Teenage_Poet_Loser))


Author's Note

((Teenage_Poet_Loser))
I think I need a break from wrting a bit, my brain is fried!

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I really like this poem, the emotion in it is flowing all through out it from beginning to end. A small space and yet a impact. The author's note I strongly agree with, breaks are good from time to time for us all. Just careful of hitting writer's block while your'e on that break. Nice write, I really like this one a lot. The way you just write it with the emotion, it a job well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


love ur writers note :-D
Yes, this is very good, so much hate, my mams friend says 'hate' is a mean word. yet, i still use it and describe it in so many ways possible because its the best word that has so many meanings to it. You did a great job of Hate :)
Beth :3

Posted 13 Years Ago


deep emotions... i love it! great write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very strong words, a lot of emotion I like your style of writing. Keep it up :D

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice write ..
so strong

Posted 13 Years Ago


Intense emotions.
Sounds like this is something you have kept bottle up for way too long.
Wonderful write.
I love the feelings through out,

Note :The first tears should be capitalized, as "Tears".



Posted 13 Years Ago


Again another great write. don't take a break; you're an amazing writer! you don't cease to amaze me with the short & simple yet straight to the point & emotionally filled poems. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Intense and raw.. well written..xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good poem, filled with emotion

Posted 13 Years Ago


A terrible feeling that tears you up from the inside out.. literally. You did a fine job of portraying your feelings, It certainly comes through.

~ rae

Posted 13 Years Ago


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