Drove Me To Kill

Sometimes we do something, with out knowing the consequanses... What follows is sometimes worse than the deed....

you come in the night
you say nothing
shouts, screams, you fill
me with absolute
rage...
my eyes bleed
the tears of sorrow,
I feel the clutch
of remorse, of guilt
of the hatred you fill
me with,
time heals no wound
wounds bleed fresh
from your cut,
the cold edge of
your knife.
Blood
drips
down
my
throat,
but you look at me,
with joy.
I see the fires of hate, the fires
of greed, the fires of self glorification
in your eyes.
A life-
so fragile in its skin-
doesn't matter to
you!
You made me cry
you made me scream
you made me who I am
you, you, yeah, you
drove me to kill...

Author's Note

I don't know if this is any good, I just let myself hit the keyboard and hope for the best!

Reviews

[Dominique]

Unnatural, but good raw talent. Man that was realy good.

[WritersSoul]

This is very cool, weird and unnatural, but writers were born to be different, writers see different things that others don't, its something beautiful writers share.
Beth :3

[Scytheriax]

Again, agreed with Maryum
The diction is simple but effective.
The imagery is perfect.
I love the emotion in the piece as well.
I also like the structure of the piece.

[Maryum Mazhar]

I love the imagery, the simple vocabulary and the obvious point.

I really hate it when people fill all their poetry with difficult vocabulary (only Shakespeare gets away with that) , so I definitely liked this : simple, powerful, sweet.

[The Exception]

What I love about poetry is that it can be so open and honest, simple and yet people can have so many different views about the same writing. This is beautiful and also scary in a way. Because we do act without thinking about the consequenses when we're provoked to act. I like this. Keep writing!

The structure of this poem is amazing both visual and while reading, it adds pace and emphasis to the poem. Very good

[J.V. Stanley]

A poem about domestic violence, very dark. Knowing a few friends of mine who have fallen victim to domestic violence that borderline on near death I can attest to the

but you look at me,
with joy.
I see the fires of hate, the fires
of greed, the fires of self glorification
in your eyes.

which is much like the mentality of the victim sometimes, especially if there still resides a great love for the attacker. A wonderfully written sad reality

[Lily Mae]

You...You...You.. :) I love it...xx

[MmeCorpse]

Hmm, a crime of passion. I think everyone's felt that way, in one way or another, at least once in each of their lives. Good poem.

[Raya Avans]

This is deep and relatable.. maybe not to me personally on that level but I feel the emotions coming out of it. While its very simply worded you create a bigger meaning that makes us feel.. did that make sense? I suppose, in my mind it did. :)

i sure hope Priscilla doesn't mind me stealing this from her but.. "Curiously, how do they make you feel when they are more pleasing to you, when your passion is full of love, of longing, of a fire that gives off a constant heat drawing your body into theirs, from a need to be as close as humanly possible??" yes.. um i think I am curious in the same way, and I feel like you could pull off a poem, story, or whatever it is you would like really well.. just seconding the suggestion out of curiosity to see what you would make of it.. =)

- rae