Single Tear Drop

A single tear drop
falls to the ground
shattering into thousands
thousands of little shards
of memories...
Moving through time, moving through memories
pictures of you, pictures of me...
I see your face
with tears rolling
s   l   o   w   l   y
down
       -down-
your cheeks
Your smile evaporates
into ashes
falling to the ground
into my tear drop...
Memories gone forever...*

Author's Note

I only got this far... felt good but then the ideas dried up =[

Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

I like it. And never fear.... Ideas don't dry up, they marinate... You can quote me on that one. Keep going. Dig deeper. 17 years old, that is when emotions run high, so let it flow. Don't think, feel, write. Let me know if that helps.

[WritersSoul]

its great :) nice opening and its gets better nearer the end
:)
Beth :3

[The fallen of innocence]

for some reason, i think it would make an awesome song!!!!!

[- - -]

I really liked this one as well, nice imagery and i don't think you need to go any further

[((Teenage_Poet_Loser))]

tnx alot all of you guys!! =D

[K.C. Zbryk]

This brilliant poem captures so many emoptions for somethig so short. Im ot shure if you should expand this any more. It almost feels complete like this. But then there are times that i have revisited ione of my pierces and needed to add more to it. In the end its your decision, but this is brilliant no matter what you choose to do with it.

[hmm]

This is amazing, I enjoyed this one.

[Maryum Mazhar]

It's awesome anyway! :D

[Maryum Mazhar]

It's good, and don't write any further cause it already says what you're trying to say.

Love the way you wrote "slowly" and the "down down" ; Playing with your words always makes it a fun read for someone else!

Note: you spelt evaporate wrong

[MmeCorpse]

I know how that feels. Walk away for a bit then come back later; you might find that special something to inspire you! I like this though, very nice.