Alofa Bread

Alofa Bread is back in town.

Alofa Bread rose out of bed

one cold and snowy morn,

put out the cat and noticed that

the flakes were made of corn.

She went outside and brushed aside

the cornflake fallen snow,

and when she did she almost slid

on white and sourdough.

She bent on down and looked around

and much to her surprise,

found little bowls of dinner rolls

with flat-bread on the rise.

She brushed more snow and found matzo

with whole wheat heels and rye;

then looking up she spied a cup

of bagels passing by.

She tossed a glance at nine croissants

beyond her Persian cat,

while in the weeds were poppy seeds

and slices of zwieback.

Alofa Bread, I've heard it said,

after taking up the grain,

mistook her chance with loaves in France,

then moved her buns to Spain.

 Best poem overall 

Jun 21, 2010

Poetry that Rhythms

Reviews

[Roland Petrov]

Funny and very clever! I see that it won Best Poem in 2010, and I see that you have entered it in the humor competition here. It would not surprise me if you win again.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Gorgeous love the rhymes good luck in my competition great poem thanks

[Dinesh Kumar]

Nicely penned
Beautiful......

[mattavelli]

Hello, Richard! :)
Lovely cadence and rhyme, and a fun read. Thanks for sharing.

[Chad Sell]

I laughed all the way through this and I'm thoroughly in love with it. This was excellent.

[Atticus Primrose]

Nearly flawless execution. The best I've read all day.

The only line that sputtered a bit in my mind, almost blocking itself is ln. 22, 'after taking up the grain'.
I think the reason it stands out so much is because every other line is so exquisite with cadence and fluidity. Take it or leave it.

Well done, I'm thoroughly impressed!

[wordwarrior]

LOVE that title to start with! OMG I LOVE the whole poem! This is hilarious and the rhyme is just amazing! The story is so cleverly penned using all those different types of bread and giving them life and her name is brilliant!
The last line had me in stitches!
This ROCKS!!

[Victoria Chang]

I LOVE THE HUMOR AND THE RYHME !!! Its fabulous! and really witty.
More power to ryhmes!!

[ice]

Good fun poetry..ya gotta love it.....

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job, well done.