Hangover

The sneer drum beats its rhythm
in methodical precision
crosshaired to a union
my upper cranium and face know
in sombre circumstances
throbbing

The shallow taps deepen
from sneer to kick
drum-rolling a halo of agony
between the clashing symbols
with symphonic clarity
throbbing

A dessert spills from my mouth
its summer there
as the drummer continues
with his theatrics
I'm hoping for rain
to absorb this pain from
throbbing

Vapours from toxic pleasures
prescribed of the night gone
with a nicotine cocktail
chlorify the act of inhaling
in healthy fashion
to a suffocating illusion
that denies sleep for
throbbing

Why are these Jetskis
buzzing around my atoll
like this
ruining my delicate coral sponge
with wave cuts close enough
the shockwaves cause me
throbbing
The drummer continues

Reviews

[Dane]

Thanks pearlday,

Your streets ahead of me when I was your age. I remember Miss Casey used to make us write relentlessly then, and when your only just keeping your nose above the watermark it was like a sentence (excuse the pun).

I like Forgotten, I would be proud to write that.

Check out the work of Ari (she's hugging what looks like a komodo dragon), she blows ME away.

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wow! such SOPHISTICATED language. that most 7th graders wouldnt understand. lol. im in 7th grade and the words you are using are outstanding in my view. the powerful words are learned later in life, rather then just the early grades of second grade. in second grade you use "i have nice brown eyes" while we use "i have gleaming hazel nut eyes that glimmer when the sun shines atop them." the language you used was ofcourse beyond that.

the more SOPHISTICATED the language is, the more meaning the word has. in the sentence "i have NICE BROWN eyes" the words we would use could be "i have EXTRAVEGENT, GLEAMING, EYEPOPPING, CHOCOLATEY, WARM eyes." each word has more meaning.

AND YOU DESCRIBED THAT POEM WITH..


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