a moment's indiscretion

light falls enraptured

on golden tussled hair

and fair, fair skin

cheeks still emblazoned

with the burning flag of passion

that is always consumed too soon.

I feel it too.

"if this were the last time,

would it have been enough?"

a lifetime of "no"s

Reviews

[Allan Eddings]

Marvelous, have you ever read Giovanni's Room? There is a line in it that suits wonderfully the sentiment of this lovely piece, "With everything in me screaming No! Yet the sum of me sighed Yes." I apologise for meandering off track but your writing here reminded me of that.

Back to point. I loved this piece, it conjures up images but the hazy images of passionate lust - clarity is not to be found in lust, least not for me (that could be the alcohol of course ha!). The words are selected to emphasize that imagery, 'tussled' or 'burning' and of course 'consumed.'

I enjoyed this piece in its totality and look forward to reading more of your work. Bravo!

A.E.

[MoriartyMesa]

This fits in Las Vegas as well as more fashionable clubs from an era past. One way or the other, nice reminder, better informer.


Enjoyed this.

[...]

. that's quite a thought ...
. and it's expressed with great intensity and conviction ...
. superbly written ...

[recantichize]

the last three lines of the the first stanza are incredibly powerful!
i think the last "no"s should be "noes"

[Coyote Poetry]

The words led the reader into powerful thoughts and passion. Some dances in desire can't be stopped. Many good question create by this amazing poetry. Thank you.
Coyote