Great Angels of God

This poem compares Great civilizations and empires to Angels who have forsaken their purpose. The first verse in this poem I borrowed from "Cruel Angel's Thesis," by Neko Oikawa.

"Like an Angel who has forsaken sympathy" 

Those with power 

Those the world needs 

Focus only on themselves 

Great Angels of God have risen 

Rome, America, Great Britain 

Just like their expansive power

This list knows no bounds

The wings on their backs 

Are called sympathy, Unity, and Peace 

These they call their motives 

But to focus on their own lust 

They forsake their own wings 

These Angels have much in common

Greed, Power, Dominance 

This list too 

Knows no bounds

Author's Note

Like I said in the description above, the first verse of this poem I borrowed from "Cruel Angel's Thesis," (The opening theme to Neon Genesis Evangelion) by Neko Oikawa.

Also, though this isn't the first poem I've ever written, I'm new to poetry, so I'm open to constructive criticism.

Reviews

[Bryan Webb]

A good piece. Keep at it and continue writing. I will say I think you could add a little more to the second and fourth stanzas, but it's still a soft and nice poem. And be careful using lines from other works if publishing ever come to mind (though Evangelion is a nice choice). Using other mediums as inspiration for a work is a great way to start something and can really help make writing out your work easier and flow nicely. Use your interests and put the virtual ink to the virtual paper. Hope this helps!

[tcblackwell]

Thanks for the review! I'll see what I can add to the stanzas you mentioned.