Across the Sands

Across the Sands

A Poem by Trevor Jay Bloodworth
"

The desert.

"

Long have I walked under the scorching sun.

Too much more of this heat and I’ll be done.

Burning and blazing with no end in sight.

Under the sun the world is fiery bright.

I’m searching for that ancient place of dreams,

Where empires rose up and roused their schemes.

The place where warriors fought and poets wrote,

The place I’ve come to make myself devote

To what once was and time did not forget,

The place that I will look upon just yet.

Soon I will see a place from within time,

Where the poets began their desert rhyme.

© 2013 Trevor Jay Bloodworth


Author's Note

Trevor Jay Bloodworth
This is a first draft/work in progress. I jotted it down the other day. I can't tell if it's fine how it is, or if it needs more. It's about Persia and all the ancient desert empires.

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The tone was set wonderfully in the beginning and continued throughout of a magical place lost in time. Very well written! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Thank you very much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Based on your bio, I am gathering that this is a war poem. I am left wanting to know where the speaker will end up when "soon" comes. I wonder if the "scorching sun" is also a state of mind?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Yes and no. The vast majority of my poems were written down range, so I know that that reflects in w.. read more
This was really cute. I really enjoyed the flow of it and I love the imagery of deserts in poetry for some reason heehee. good write :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Thank you. I really wasn't sure what to do with this little piece. I couldn't decide if it was fine .. read more
That was a great piece to read
wonderful

Posted 11 Years Ago


Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

Thanks, glad that you liked it.
stars are far

11 Years Ago

my pleasure
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Sam
It has a very druid feel.I like it so where ever you take this poem I will follow. It is your masterpiece done when you say it is. ;) sorry I am not more help than that but it is hard not knowing the flow you are looking for. I like the title.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sam

11 Years Ago

Oh? Are they your favorite too?
Trevor Jay Bloodworth

11 Years Ago

It's all the same to me really. Haha. I enjoyed writing it and it expresses what I was feeling at th.. read more
Sam

11 Years Ago

Oh ya... to see where they wrote and where they walked. Would be a sight to see.

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Added on July 23, 2013
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Trevor Jay Bloodworth
Trevor Jay Bloodworth

Bradford, TN



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Just another guy. Nothing special. 22 years old. From Tennessee. I started writing as a hobby while on deployment. I love poetry and that's my art form. I'm heavily influenced by the poets of the Roma.. more..

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