Anything but Nothing

From a book I'm working on. Thought I'd throw it up here :)

My vision pulsed on and off in time with my heart beat. I knew I was losing blood, too much blood. I felt him pull me to him, felt his tears come crashing down on my face, felt the vibration of his screams that echoed through the night, but it was as if I were elsewhere. As if I had been disconnected from myself yet was granted permission to watch the thread that connected me to consciousness suffer from an increasing tension until the strand snapped and I fell into the ever impending darkness... falling, falling, witnessing my consciousness  slip through my fingers with shaky vision until I was to far gone to see anything but nothing. 

Author's Note

What'd you think? :)

Reviews

[khalid]

nicely penned, no word missed, i like it

[escapingherself]

Lovely! It's so short yet it's also intense. I really enjoy the line about the thread growing tense and snapping. It gives the impression of slowly fading out and then simply disappearing in a single moment. Well done!

[tballerina96]

Thanks so much! This piece just came to me. It didn't require much thinking for me and that's why I personally like this one :)

[Carissa Marie]

I love it. I can picture it in my mind. :)

[deaths calling]

i love how dark you made it

[char]

You should post a chapter.

[tballerina96]

Maybe I will once Ive proof read for the thousandth time :)

[DeCipher]

Very deep stuff! Hope to hear more of it.