Too Late for Goodbyes

Seven years ago, while she lay asleep

He packed his things and turned to leave

He never said I'm sorry or stayed to see her cry

He just left her with no last goodbye

 

Seven years went by, and he never did write

Just a lonely phone call one hot August night

He didn't say how are you or I hope everything is all right

He just talked about the weather, but left no goodbye

 

Three years later, standing in the rain

He thinks about the woman, and all the pain

He wished he had said I am sorry or stayed to see her cry

To help her understand all the reasons why

 

But the caretaker is calling it's time to leave

The gates are closing no more time to grieve

He'd give anything for one more try

But the woman, chiseled in stone, won't hear his goodbye

Reviews

[closed account]

very sad,, was this when you left to Desert Storm?? or I guess I shouldn't speculate it could be fiction.. either way this was a great write!!

[Midnitefyrfly]

Resounds sadly in my head. Evokes feelings I am all too familiar with. It is very well written, reads like a sad story.

[J.mccabe -critique Welc..]

DAMN!!!!

Thats all I have to say Sir

[Brianna Brie]

You had me crying by the end of the description, but then again you summoned my own personal demons.

Seven years went by, and he never did write
Just a lonely phone call one hot August night

These lines work for me and I'm not even sure why.

But the woman, chiseled in stone, won't hear his goodbye

Just loving this description. Good job

[Madelaine]

o0. Aw...I feel like telling everyone that I love them right now. =P This was so...sad. It was a lovely write. Thanks so much for entering.

[Goddess Sophia (filomen..]

WHEW!! !heavy....you should read my GOODBYE arrived...
ahh...this was heart wrenching......huge grapefruit stuck in my throat feeling...
you know...when you just can no longer talk...for your rendered me in sorrow....
aww the pain of regret.

[Crap!]

This was so sad and I understood the warning. Great job on this. I keep hearing Julian Lennon singing, " Now it's much too late for goodbye.."

[* Mourning Starr *]

Brillant work J., excellent flow and imagery.....

[Ameashi]

what an amazing piece this is. the flow and rhyme through out is brilliant. the feelings and words brought tears to my eyes. the ending says it all. great job with this beautiful poem

[MandarinOranges]

So very sad and beautifully written. I liked how you convey a lesson to be learned here. Nice job.