is it over

is it over

is this what i wanted

is this the last straw

is true happiness

a lie a fake

is it over

before it started

i lost my dad

i lost my brother

is it over

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l

l

y

over

is this the life i wanted

did i really lose at life to

is it over

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad poem with very good questions. Death teaches us the real world of pain. No words can cure the pain. It is not over. Need to be strong and remember the good people in a life. They would want a good life for you . Thank you for a powerful poem.
Coyote

[Everson Taveras]

What a melancholic write. There are some adjustments you should make in this poem: like when you wrote "a lie a fake" you repeat the definition of deception which is unnecessary here. One word will do. (By the by, I don't know if this was intentional or by accident, but the falling "really" could symbolize our decadence to sorrow and self doubt. If it was intentional, I applaud you; if not, well, it doesn't matter either way because it doesn't impair or improve the poem, given that it is such a subtle connotation.) Thank you for sharing.

[EMMIE]

SAD...BUT SO CREATIVE. IT'S UNIQUELY WRITTEN AND MOVED ME. GREAT WRITE!

[Priscilla Sayers]

Very sorrowful, and well conveyed. You gave the reader the face of your pain, now I would love to see the depth of what truely lies beneath this poem.

[Alex Figueroa]

woah its short but so deep, true sadness, its almost sounds like it has a lil agony around "really", with a hint of doubt =] its very good keep it up!

[Rene Velez]

heart wrenching and real, a sad poem that grabs the reader, well done..

[Aly Jones]

This is sad.