alone

i am alone
i walk through the halls and no one notices me
am i deadd or alive
forgotten all alone
i cry out but no one hears
i am alone
i wonder can they hear me
can they see me
am i gone
passed away for all eternity
the tears that fall down my cheeks
are the lonlyness i feel
deep inside my heart
i am a misfit
trying to fight
away to fit in is not seen
i am alone
am i died or alive
or forgotten all alone

Reviews

[KristenMaye]

wonderful poem, you really make me feel the isolation. I especialy like the alternation of "I am" and "am I"

a few spelling mistakes -noone, cheaks, lonlyness, away (should be "a way")
grammar- lines 4 and 17 "dead" instead of "died"
I think that adding punctuation would greatly increase the impact of the piece (capitalization too)

[*[_Natasha_]*]

so sad, but a good poem indeed. nice job

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This is so sad but so well expressed,
Your emotions run deep.