someday

i remember the day
you caught the wind
inside your arms and
kissed its cheek once
before letting it go.
you told me that if
i really loved him i
would let him go, but
i never was able to
ask you how i was
supposed to let you
go if i never had you
in the first place.
you were never one
to be hypocritical
like me, but you
were always one to
call me out on it.
i never wanted to be
something that my
mother once was, but
sometimes we cannot
become what our poor
hearts aspire us to.
you always picked
the girls that were
fine; the ones who
when they said they
were okay, they really
meant it.  you never
liked the broken ones.
you never wanted one
that you had to save.
you never wanted me.
and somehow, that was
okay because in a way,
that was me letting
go of you, just like
you never had me 'cause
you never took me.

Reviews

[KeeD]

Beautiful piece, I like the presentation and the story it tells. I like the imagery where you compared the relationship to an armful of wind, you can only try and hold on to it for so long but it has to be set free, it's to complicated to hold on too, sometimes It's like it was never there, sometimes it feels like it will always be around. Pretty cool write, Very creative, a lot of respect to this piece which has both strength and emotion flowing very well.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thanks so much! :)

[John F Carver]

Very poetic especially the first sentence. I enjoyed it.

[Angelove]

Just remember that You should capitalize your I's but, other in other words I loved this poem.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you, but it was meant to be written that way.

[Lexi I.]

This was GREAT! You told a complex story in only a few lines! This speaks to the elusive nature of love--not knowing when to grasp it and when to let it go. Sometimes the fear of love keeps us from loving and showing others that we love them. I'm sure we've all had those instances where it is just so hard to let someone know you care for him/her for fear of rejection. This poem really struck that chord within me!

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you!

[CecilA]

Hey Hey'

I have to agree with all the previous reviews. I especially love that you have allowed us to freely embody your body and experience your poem in its entirety to feel all that you felt; "that was okay because in a way, that was me letting go of you, just like you never had me 'cause you never took me."

OMG Taylor you are genuine; a poet. Thanks for sharing it with us.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you so much!

[Lina Grey]

lovely. the formatting makes me think of a little child, trying to understand something complicated, even if simple, by talking themself through it. I like the metaphor in the beginning, and the thought out description of the relationship, how it's described through example of what happened rather than saying what happened. a very strong, emotive piece hun. great job :)

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you so much!

[patti]

i really amazing poem i have to say, i enjoyed readind every line i have to say... a really good poem, good job

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you

[LynGeist]

I love the picture of catching the wind in your arms. Very beautiful. Such an easy flowing poem full of strength and sadness both. Very nice

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you!

[bravesoul]

wow. This is amazing. Truly. I felt the emotion that was weaved inside this piece. I felt the hurt that you put into this. The words flowed and it was easy and nice to read.

Amazing job!

[Hey Hey Renee]

Thank you so much!

[KAOlmsted]

Holy cats, dude...this is really good.

[Hey Hey Renee]

Ahaha, thank you!

[KAOlmsted]

Absolutely.