She Loves You

The pain left in her eyes,

Can be seen because your lies.

The hurt in her heart,

Will never be healed because you stabbed it with something sharp.

Why did you let her go,

Why didn't you just hold her close?

Did you not know how much she cares,

Did you even notice how much she needed you there.

If you would have just seen her that night,

You would have never ended it, due to fright.

She is nothing without you near,

She needs you to hold her close dear.

Letting her go, was that easy,

Or did you just do it to make her queazy.

How can you look at her and feel nothing,

You held her close, told her she was your everything.

How could you just let that go,

When she has still kept her hope.

Look at this from someone else's view,

No matter how blind, you could see, She Loves You.

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

Great rhyming and I like your presentation. Well done.

[this close]

You always have the best poems.

[The Analog Kid]

You took those simple feelings and made them very poetic. Good rhyming:)

[closed..acct]

Wow, this is really amazing, I totally love this write.
Your feelings are powerful.

[Reaper]

This poem really hit me. It reminds me a lot about my past, where this poem would have fit the situation. Well done.

[Chris Yip]

good write and read about a girl's broken heart. Well expressed and rhymed. keep the good work up. Thank you.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

wow thia is really good! i love this! mind checking out someof my stuff? thanks

[Muse]

depressing...but full of emotion. This is what a poet does best...bleed the feeling into poetic words for the rest of us to enjoy and reflect upon.

[ATG]

A lovely written, but sad poem. The overall flow of the poem worked out well and there wasn't any noticeable errors. The concept behind the poem was very touching and the poem did a great job at conveying the sadness behind the subject.