Silver to Red

The Silver Ship,

Traveling into a deep Red Sea,

...

Has a map drawn on me.

Silver Ship looking through the sea,

The Silver Ship has it's anchor set in me.

A course carted so young,

Running through the roughest of storms,

...

Finding new territory to be torn.

Silver Ship looking through the sea,

The Silver Ship has its anchor set in me.

Longing to stop its trip,

Red waters ready for another release,

...

Looking for the pressure to be eased.

Silver Ship looking through the sea,

The Silver Ship has its anchor set in me.

Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

Slightly eerie! "Red waters ready for another release," sounds like self-harm to me. Some young people do go through that, I know. We have to steer our ship as best we can. If that involves going through dark seas of self-discovery then so be it.

[A. Amos]

Great work and love the last line...

[Justin]

*creepy voice* excellent...

[Glitter]

I know this one was from a year ago but I really love it. Well done~

[Sami Khalil]

A nice write...:).........

[Sunflower]

carted should be the word charted**

[Kiara]

I like this one

[The Analog Kid]

This is really cool. The repetition works and the visuals are quite nice. Also lyrical.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

I like the style of this poem.

Good job!