Can You See It

Can you see it

On my face.

Can you see it

In my paleness.

Can you see it

Engulfing my every being.

Can you see it

Controlling my mind.

Can you see it

Ruining my future.

Can you see it

Killing me slowly.

Can you see it

Destroying who I am.

Can you see it

Has me right where it wants me.

Addicted.

Reviews

[5minutesofcrazy]

I love it. The structure, the mood, the message. It is simple, but yet so telling. The progression you are showing is very real. Yet you are not belaboring the events, which would be very easy to do. The consistency of your opening (for me) begins to draw expectation of the deterioration that is to be named. I really liked this.

[Emrick]

I like everything about this poem.The style,the the idea,the theme.everything flows together very smoothly.
Nice poem.

[MandaBear]

Very interesting poem. Beautiful

[Salar Majak]

it's beautiful, hauntingly beautiful,

[beautiful dreamer]

ahhh it's so hard to review people from my own school! this poem is very haunting and i can feel the emotion in it. very tugging and pleading. it makes my heart feel heavy. and i'm writing this right next to you lol!