Drift Me

Times of ultimate vulnerability...

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drift me,

send me,

take me to a distant land.

 

find me,

soothe me,

bring me more to me than i am.

 

hold me,

reach me,

see in me the pain that is.

drift away the darkness, and find me all the hope to live.

 

no death,

no light,

no sounds to soothe.

 

no streams,

no thoughts,

no past to remove.

 

drift me to a place that speaks only silent words of harmony.

drift me to a sound to hear my sorrow as it draws from me.

 

reach me,

see me as i lay inside this shell.

and small the child with in grows, screaming in this burning hell.

 

small the child within me grows sowing the seeds of despair.

deep within the shadows roam causing me to weep and stare.

 

causing me to find no words to say to you my pain.

it hurts deeply and never ending the source awaiting shame.

 

don't want to read

don't want to talk,

just hold me in your arms.

 

keep me from my distant dreams

away from night time harm.

 

where are you mother?

the night is long. the nights unforgiving sights.

the truth calling me to run, but my legs too locked in fright.

 

her touch

his touch

her touch so true.

a distance in the morning light, a voice " i love you"

 

 

call me in and keep me safe...

the night is all too dark, the pain too great.

 

~Taubah Blackman

Reviews

[Taubah Blackman]

thank you for your reviews. Michael, in what context do you believe the word "drift" is used in this poem? Why is this wrong? What in your opinion would be the 'right' context? thank you again for your reviews.

Taubah

[Michael X]

This is a great effort, and the feeling is there.
what I liked most is the imagery and the overshadowing sense
of desire, as well as the ambition put forth
what I liked least, is the word "drift" is used in the wrong context,
and the inconsistant punctuation..imo
but I can't say it took away from the quality of effort.
keep up the great writing.

[Chris Willits]

To me that sounds like it would be a great song.