Fragile Hearts

A glass house

In the middle of the woods

A relationship was built on

Stones thrown tough

A happy home 

They thought it would be not this rough,

But when passerby's saw the glass

They couldn't resist because for months

They could hear the arguments

Coming from within

So they added fuel to the fire

And threw stones of their own

Even threw some under garments,

Why they could not understand

Because what goes on within that couples life

Was mean to be

For what others were not to see

They were no longer here to be,

The depths of love therefore are fragile

Though the heart made of glass

This is what sometimes happens

Behind closed doors

Should not be within reach of outsiders.

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

You have a great framework here Tarry, I love the idea of a remote glass house. Outsiders think they can see through the transparent walls, but regardless of how things look, or sound to the rest of the world, there are unknown depths even the greatest divers could not know - that we ourselves sometimes do not even know. In short, this is a stunning concept. If I'm being critical, I would say that this may work better with breaks in the stanzas, and slightly more focus on flow. Particularly the line "they thought it would be not this tough" , is a bit over thought in my opinion, and could be simplified to fit into an apt rhythm

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Willow

[Leigh]

Its always best not to interfere

[Tarry Franck]

So true leighgreen

[Michael G. Smith]

Very creative take on not airing one's dirty laundry. Hurtful words are like darts that can pierce the heart.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Michael

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Yeah screams to wreck a home to were wood even give way,Something crash in the clouds and crack in the night! Great poem Tarry:)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank Jonathan

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Your quite welcome my friend:)

[Frieda P]

Good message on love and human frailties, nothing is ever as it seems, nicely pen'd my friend :-)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Frieda

[A Soap Mess Stories]

True love can never be messed with ........

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Starrleena

[ANTO]

Some people love to stir Tarry. We are all at their mercy - only true love can see beyond their fabrications.
Very poignant writing with a lesson therein

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Anto

[Eddie Phillips]

A great poem. The world is a unforgiving place. I would work a little on punctuation and remove a few unneeded words. I will still say that you killed the idea.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Eddie

[Antoñyo]

So, so true...and "they couldn't resist..." so realistically human nature.

Thanks for the share

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Antonyo

[MikeV]

I love the message of this one! :)
People think they
know things just because they can see them
but really they should just mind there own business

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much Mike