Awaiting

I'm just awakening

From a slumber sleep

And see the moon

Still shining for me,

Awaiting a magical moment

For my lover to arrive

I await patiently

As my heart for him thrives,

As he approaches I get so excited

My heart beats frantically

And I fall into his arms

Whole heartedly,

He lifts me for a lovers twirl

And passionately kisses me

Something I've been craving

I can't thank you enough baby.

Reviews

[Star]

I loved this. It flowed well, told a story and made me remember how I once felt that excitement for someone I was in love with. Good job.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Star

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Well, you did it again! You expressed my feelings exactily while waiting for my lover. I am anxiously waiting for his arrival tomorrow September 13, 2013...well written, so passionate, romantic......

[Tarry Franck]

Glad I could be of help ;) Thanks for reviewing Starrleena

[ANTO]

I can literally feel the excited 'butterfyl' feeling in this poem Tarry and
then the line 'He lifts me for a lovers twirl' almost made me wish it was me being twirled lol.
Great lovers prose Tarry.
X

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much Anto

[Anand Sehgal]

I'm just awakening
From a slumber sleep
And see the moon
Still shining for me,

lovely imagery. Would have loved to see the poem a bit more scenic :)
anyways good write

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for reviewing Anand

[Eddie Phillips]

I am a romantic and this poem pulls at the romantic in me. You crafted a lovely poem of love and passion. Thank you for this beautiful poem.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much Eddie

[MikeV]

You paint a beautiful picture with your words
I could feel the emotions as i read. Just wonderful!
Keep it up! :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much

[Sami Khalil]

I like this poem wholeheartedly...Splendid...:)

[Tarry Franck]

Thanks you so much Sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Boranus]

that last line "I can't thank you enough baby" ruined the whole poem.
Leave it out.

[Tarry Franck]

Thanks for your consideration.

[Frieda P]

I see you being swept off your feet Tarry, whilst twirling in your in your passionate embrace, luverly my friend. :-)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much dear friend.

[Lover Of Words]

This is amazing in so many ways. Amazing and breathe taking love is all over this page and your heart.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much

[Lover Of Words]

Your very welcome