Eternal Connection

You're a beauty queen, my light

That makes my smile come to life

You are the sunshine that lights my day

And the moon that lights my night

You are my heart, my smile,

My soul, my breath

My wisdom, my strength

My life, my death,

My eternity, my rebirth

I live and die for you

I reawaken for you as well

So I do not have to live

A life of hell.

Author's Note

Written by Kelsey Blanchard and Tarry Franck

Reviews

[Ohhhwillow]

Much of the words in this poem are synonymous with passion, and characteristic of gothic imagery. This is nice, it flows softly, and indeed is incredibly romantic. I love your use of natural imagery, indeed the moon is the most beautiful, powerful light of all! Next time I would like to see some experimenting with language, maybe some abstract words, to make this shine even more. :) Nice write you two

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much Willow

[A Soap Mess Stories]

You and Kelsey did a fine job. You two work well together. Loved the passionate imagery in this.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much - our first time!

[TC Dunn]

"I reawaken for you" ...so lovely. What a beautiful poem. Very passionate. Well done.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much TC

[Lover Of Words]

I am in love with this one as i told you when we were finished writing it my compliments to you turned into a poem. :)

[Tarry Franck]

And I truly love it - I think we did a great job on this together. Finally one written together after all this time.

[Lover Of Words]

It was about time it was deffentally over due... Hopefully there will be more written together as we spend more and more time together..

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

A tender sentiment here...undying love. It is beautiful when we find someone who is willing to lay themselves at our feet if ever the need arises. I imagine that this is the way love is supposed to be. You have penned the emotions in this one beautifully, and it really moved me in the reading.

Technical: The only thing I would suggest to punch this up a notch would be some more tangible imagery. Instead of, for instance, saying "you are the sunshine that lights my day", you could describe that sunshine "you are the sun's light raining upon me" or "my day is set aglow with your sunlight smile", something like that. Otherwise, nicely done.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much my dear friend

[OBWhiteHawk]

Very sweet and loving, the caring and tenderness here shines through so clearly. Well done!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much for reviewing

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and positive poem for love. We need love and kindness daily to keep us human. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much for reviewing this poem.

[AlchemicPlutonian]

Sounds passionately holistic, personal, and eternal.
A strong sense of soul-mate emotion.
I like it.

EDIT: After writing this, I realized once more what the title was.
Excuse the redundancy. Anyhow, I suppose if anything it solidifies your title. =P