Sit For A Spell

I twist, I turn

Can't open 

A key trying to get through the door

And I fall

Yet silent to the floor,

Have I been locked out

Yet again

While an errand

Me you send,

You not only locked me out

But my love as well

Where do I go from here

To sit for a spell.

Reviews

[Leigh]

Neat and quick lines detail significant moments well. Locked out of the house symbolising being locked out of love is a great parallel, try your key somewhere else!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much leigh and I have. This one is a keeper! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime all we can do is to sit a spell. Figure how to get up and go forward. Nice flow of thoughts led to a very good ending. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Coyote

[Frieda P]

Cast away & deserted speaks in generous terms in this one Tarry...succinct and you nailed it!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This felt oddly surreal to me...as though I fell down the rabbit hole and then someone wrote me a love poem. I quite liked the feeling :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so very much

[Lover Of Words]

Do you know how amazing this is? this is great i love it great job... Stay strong

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Lover Of Words]

you are very welcome :)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Great write. I could feel the abandonment in this. Hope all works out well.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[YouoweYoupay]

This feeling of being suddenly abandoned or not needed was captured well in this night cricket themed scene. Enjoyed the bit of creative expression. Keep writing.

Rain.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so very much

[OBWhiteHawk]

Damn that meaning is so clear yet you don't come out and say it. If that makes sense. I relate almost more with the way my mom used to treat me to this then to how a girlfriend ever treated me. But I still feel what your saying here, man.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much

[quinfinn]

back up and regroup, my honeysuckle bee......you are worth being truly loved. dont take anything less than 100% devotion and total adoration...great write, sweet friend !

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for such kindness, my huckleberry ;)

[Sami Khalil]

"Me you send,
You not only locked me out
But my love as well
Where do I go from here"
It is a nice one indeed. I like the metaphors used too...:)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome ...:)