Holding On Forever

You're such an amazing woman

Beautiful inside and out

I could never turn from those hugs, those kisses

The grasp of your hands

I would be lost without you in my world, my land,

You're a diamond to me that shines so bright

But I could never be

Blinded by your light,

You also carry a gift of gold

Within your heart

Within your soul,

And with that

You I will forever hold.

Author's Note

Dedicated to my wonderful niece, Kelsey! Love you!

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad, and while the subject matter is definitely overdone, it's still nice to read and fun to write, so you've done well in that regard. My one concern is that maybe it's a little over-complimentary - depending on the age of your niece, she might get a bit of a swelled head from reading it, but you know her better than I do, and at any rate, it's a very touching gesture. Well done.

[Tarry Franck]

I do not think the subject matter is overdone and am glad you think it's a nice write and I've done well in that regard. It's not over-complimentary - not even a little. And as far as my niece, if you read above you will know how my niece feels. Thank you for the compliment.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Such a warm and generous tribute. You must really cherish her.

[Tarry Franck]

I most certainly do and thank you

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful and hopeful poem of love. Kelsey is lucky to have you. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much Coyote

[Holly Mason]

your niece is very lucky...she has you!
another lovely piece carry the gift of gold..nice
thank you for sharing

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for such a kind review :)

[Frieda P]

Another lovely dedication to your lovely niece, very special and full of heart.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Frieda :)

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy,..]

This is a lovely dedication to your niece, I understand what Trigorin is talking about if your take out the line "those wonderful hands" it reads differently. Yes, I read it without that line, try it and let me know what you think.

[Tarry Franck]

I understand where you're coming from and your point of view and I do agree with you but there is a reason that line is in there and it was written FOR her and not the reader. We held hands while my Dad, her grandfather was dying and that pulled us through something very difficult that neither of us had been through. Watching him being taken off of life support. So the line stays because as I said it's for her, for us to understand. This is a dedication to HER. I'm not being rude just letting you know where it stems from. K?!!! Does that help you a little more?

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Yes I do understand your compassion, its just the line, "those wonderful hands". Your explanation displays a different path like "the grasp of your hands" shows a connection. The other line states you admire the look of her hands, to me.

[Tarry Franck]

Oh, now I didn't think about that - I do like that much better and it does read much better. Why didn't you give me that line in the first place LOL. Thanks for helping out. It's much appreciated my poet friend. :))))))

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy, Jr]

Anytime, LOL, I really liked this poem.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much - especially for the help ;)

[C.C. Marx]

*cant

[Tarry Franck]

;)

[C.C. Marx]

You can get much more sincere or genuine than that, nice job!!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so very much C.C.

[C.C. Marx]

My pleasure tarry!

[quinfinn]

a beautiful declaration of love, written straight from the heart. well done!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you and yes straight from the heart. Thank you dear friend :)

[Lover Of Words]

As you know i am never going to walk away from you i will always be waiting for you if you ever need me or just need a person to lean to you can lean on me and i will always hold you up... My hands will be waiting for you to take when ever you may need it or even when you dont.. I will always be your angel... No matter what I am here for you more then you know days pass and i cant not be more greatful for you

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear :)

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure