Breaking The Spell

You cast a spell over others

Everyone is acting so strange now

She doesn't know what to think

She stands to you in place

Wondering what you're going

To throw in her face,

She's quite enchanted

And you don't know you can't

Reach her with your dark spell

You begin an incantation

Of words in a language

She does not comprehend

But she's protected quite well,

You see she too is a witch

And you are no match for her

However you do dare

She is protected

By such forces

And illuminating light

Which you can not see

Because the darkness

Has a hold on you

And you will never be free,

So thrown your way

She casts her hands

Reaching your dark land,

With such white light

And there's nothing you can do

But run from such power

And attempt to hide

For you are now blinded,

Because it protects her

From your evil ways

And away from others

You are binded and will stay

Far, far, forever away.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Really not bad. You've achieved that level of simplicity that's necessary for an effective exposition in poetry, and you've managed to portray a very vivid and lifelike tale. I might recommend breaking this up into stanzas, just to make it easier to read, but that's a matter of personal taste. Very well done.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much for reviewing and your kind words.

[Tarry Franck]

This IS much better thanks for the advice. :)

[beautiful dreamer]

i'm so so sorry it took so long to get to all of these. they are amazing you are amazing! great job tarry

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much for you reviewing my poems. It's much appreciated. I've seen you've been busy. But like you, I need to catch up myself. I know how you feel.

[Rufus "Mr Blaque" Lacy,..]

She will drop her guard one, and he will be there waiting. nicely written

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[quinfinn]

this reminded me of the battle scene on the uriah heep album "demons and wizards" for some reason. i just got that surreal feel from this marvelous piece. well done!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank for the wonderful compliment dear friend, quin

[Frieda P]

Bewitching! I would imagine two witches cancel each other out...not that I'd know about that, ha. Light read with a dark message, much enjoyed.

third line - she 'doesn't' know

[Tarry Franck]

Thanks Frieda - correction made! Thanks for pointing that out to me!!!!

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this tale. I like that the woman was protected from the magic and turn the table. A very nice story in the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Coyote - women are powerful and had to prove it here.

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Wow! Spell binding! Good job!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you Starrleena

[Lover Of Words]

You have left me speechless all i can say is WOW.... NIce job!!!!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear :)

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure