Haunting Footsteps

Haunted footsteps coming from behind

Do I dare look back

Do I want to see what I find,

They seem to be approaching

Faster and faster

What shall I do

Turn face to face

Or run like hell

In hopes to escape,

The thunder I feel

Below my feet

Due to the force

This creature has

Most certainly enforced,

I run to a place

That I don't think it will find me

And I feel safe,

But for how long

I do not know

For he has a keen sense

And I find where I belong,

Among my people

They will try to save me from anything

But this vicious creature

May take us all and everything,

What does he want that I have

And if he cant find us now

How long will he search

How long will he haunt.

Reviews

[luviva]

ohhh.
ok i dont knw what creature is on your case but all i know is you are scared and got limited choices.
your descriptive nature of writing is good and appealing to the writer. the detail that you give your readers just urges them to continue you..
because of curiosity!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear friend

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Just wondering who the creature is that won't let you be....hope you get some peace....

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Margarette]

I like the way you end the poem with a question leaving the reader to create his/her own ending. The feelings expressed such as that of being caught and the thrill of running away are really vivid. There is a nice flow of the story and the situation is pretty intense. Thanks for sharing!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you for a great review :)

[Ohhhwillow]

Our daemons are never too far behind us, they lurk like shadows, forever casting a darker picture of ourselves.. It's important to stay in the light and fight them, only you can stop it. I like this, well done, the one line "and my find where I belong", is there a grammatical error here?

[Tarry Franck]

Correction made - thank you for pointing that :)And thank you for the kind words

[Ahmad Cox]

I love your beautiful metaphor for the inner demons we all have to face every day.

[Tarry Franck]

Unfortunately we - & Some more than others. Thank you for reviewing and the kindness of your review.

[David Scott]

Your going into the darker relms of late... I think I might get worried. ha
I felt hunted in this poem. Well done.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you my friend

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

I know this feeling and it haunts me as well
Maybe in a different sense but well done

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you so much and understanding

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

thank you for writing

[Tarry Franck]

No Problem!

[quinfinn]

if this was a dream it makes me wonder what it is you are running from and just how insideous a creature it really is. well written and fast paced, this is a write which is sure to please all who read. very good indeed!

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you ;)

[Lover Of Words]

I like this and yes yes i know i already read it over the phone! But i really really really like it.. and heyyy you used the tittle i gave you! YAY love it nice work :)

[Tarry Franck]

Yes darling I did, thank you so much for the input :)

[Lover Of Words]

Thats the joy of having me too help! LOL and it was my pleasure! I enjoyed it picking tittles you is fun :)

[Frieda P]

Sounds like some of the demons that hide out in my closet nightly. Lots of tension in this read...you just need to run upstairs where there's no escape, like the dumb asses do in the movies! All kidding aside, an emotive read...kind of creepy. Nice.

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Frieda P]

My pleasure.