Fate

In the shadows she hides

Fear of the suns light

She wraps herself in darkness

Where she feels safe

Safest in the night,

A hole in her heart bleeds

Because there is something

That's missing and she's in need,

Of what she can't quite decide

Her scattered feelings racing

Racing through her mind,

To paper and pen she turns

Yet finds it difficult

To write what she yearns,

Then suddenly within her darkness

Where she thought safe

She met a match

That yielded her fate.

Reviews

[DrD]

And was that match postiive or negative? The open ending lures us into this and the only line I held in question was "A hole in heart bleeds" simply because it is not complete. As a whole, however, the mechanics are good and the theme comes across into an interesting and worthwhile read.

[Tarry Franck]

Was to be "A hole in her heart bleeds" I corrected it, if that helps.

[marie]

wow love the ending great poem loved it :)

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you very much

[marie]

no prob :)

[A Soap Mess Stories]

Lovely...so mysterious...

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you all!

[quinfinn]

funny how fate will reveal itself to one after destiny has been forsaken for intervention of life. this is nicely done, very nicely done.

[Lover Of Words]

I like this one you took me on a journey! lovely write

[Coyote Poetry]

Fate can lead to many places. Some can be dark. I like the journey in the poem. I like the strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote