Shrouded In Darkness

My mind in chaos

Not sure where to turn

Can't handle the vibrations

From the sounds

So I stay in isolation

Want no others around,

It's easier to stay in the dark

No need to burden them

With my clouded thoughts,

For they have nothing to gain

But I will find

The strength to hide

The weakness and sorrow I feel

But for now, here I remain

Shrouded in darkness

While their moon waxes

And mine wanes.

Reviews

[Emily B]

Robert Frost has a poem called "Revelation" We find ourselves a place apart / behind light words that tease and flout / but, oh, the agitated heart / til someone find us really out

We all hide ourselves from those around us sometimes. I am a practiced chameleon of many years. Frost says "But so with all from babes that play at hide and seek to God above, that all who hid too well away must speak and tell us where they are."

Robert Fulghum said it this way, "Get Found, Kid!"

[Lover Of Words]

ONE WORD

AMAZING

[Tarry Franck]

Thank you dear

[Lover Of Words]

My pleasure

[Coyote Poetry]

A very strong poem. Good to hide in the darkness to gather strength and thoughts. I like the way you led the reader into thoughts and location. The ending was amazing.
"Shrouded in darkness
While their moon waxes
And mine wanes.'
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Excellent Tarry. I have been in this place many times in my life. The last time I was there for years........

[MOON]

Good write poignant easier to stay in the dark...Last two lines emotional.

[Hannah]

I agree with the other critique about the stanza division. It makes it a little bit difficult to read. That being said, I feel like the emotion behind the poem is pretty solid and definitely conveys to the reader.

[tekphobik]

I found the stanza division a little awkward, but who's to say I have any merit as a literary critic. I'd like to see more comparison between what exactly their brightness is and what exactly your darkness is. Just sayin'.