a young boy

the thrill of a young beautiful woman

There was a young man who was a little over weight everyone made fun of him because of the couple extra pounds.. One day when he was outside his house in the far distance he could see a beautiful young woman as she started to get closer his heart started to race. His legs got weak he couldn't walk nor say a word. The closer she got the hotter he got he started to sweat not knowing what to say or do he sat there watching the sway of her hips the twinkle of her eye how every step was like a rythem. But not to fast nor slow she came closer and closer and closer. By the time she reached him there was a puddle of sweat his eyes were as big as golf balls he just stared. She stopped infront of him and asked whats wrong you look very sick. He slowly said your as beautiful as the stars at night your rythem when you walk makes my legs go weak the twinkle in your eyes makes me wanna cry. He saw tears run from her face the make up rolled with the tears. Where did you learn how to make a woman feel so special?? Because it's not the clothes they wear it's not the money they got it's behind the eyes it's a story that i could read from 3 blocks away. You wander why i make you feel that way.... next time you se someone be opened minded look into there eyes and i promise you there will be a story...............

Reviews

[Tony]

This piece is colorful and descriptive. It is easy to read and interesting.
I would encourage you to keep a dictionary at hand, and take the time to get your spelling right. You will be glad you did.
Nice work, Talon!

[Becca*Type2012]

Awwww! Very sweet story. That young man knows more about how to make somene feel special than most of the idodic guys out there. This should be a giude for all of the male sex on how to treat a woman. Amazing story. :-)

[AshleyAnne.]

Good job darlin, :)
This is my favorite