Shattered

Broken

Breathless, the visions, pulsing, refined,

Choking and gasping. I'm dying.. rewind,

 

Emotions were pulling, our words so unkind,

Tugging but fading, your no longer mine,

 

Seeing. Believing.. no longer combined,,

You stole my damn heart and left me behind....

 

Reviews

[A.Lee]

I love this. Especially the last line. Very well written and as always I love the rhythm in your work. Great job.

[Dream Weaver]

A super urbanized description
of a broken heart....Nicely done
RTB

[HopelesslyDevoted]

wow, the only word i can come up with for this one is intoxicating. love it!

[Roxi L]

I can relate. Again short but so much emotion. I love it! Keep Writing
Writing keeps the dream alive
Never

[Sports Girl]

Very emotional and beautiful poem. I know how you feel. Great job

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Awe this was emotional and heartbreaking. I can relate to it. Thanks for sharing.

[?]

Another powerful emotional poem.
I know this is not easy, been there done that. Kinda there now.
But it is in these time we grow.
So hang in there
Great write
Thanks for sharing with me

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Powerful

[SR Urie]

I feel ya' dog, it sux when the romance is tossed in the shitcan. Excellent use of rhyme, keep it up! BZ

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing flow of words. No wasted words. Just words with purpose and strength. A excellent poem. I like it all. A very good ending to your poem. Thank you.

Coyote