Suicide

Clenching the divine in the palm of my hand,

Release is my options no room to expand,

 

Digging in deep for this vigorous trial,

Only to come back with a vicious denial,

 

Glistening once but now ominous my eyes,

Plainly just darkness no splits or divides,

 

My emotion now simple to others it spreads,

Gave one last look in the mirror and blew off my head..

 

Reviews

[Matthew Kult]

Excerllent write. I love your style.

Regards,

Matthew

[Addie]

Oh my God! My heart skipped a beat when I read that last line. Very emotional and vivid.

[Coyote Poetry]

People think death is hard. Using a gun is not the best way to kill yourself. The bones in your heard can slow a bullet down and it could do little damage. A very sad poem. Suicide is the easy way out. What comes next could be worst? A interesting poem. Not my favorite topic.
Coyote

[Haifa]

Wow, you did a great job on this poem. Really powerful poem. AWW poor teddy bear lol. Well done man and keep writing.

[ANGEL.X]

woowww a really powerful poem, loved the way you ended it! its quite creepyy but in a GOOD way LOL :) x

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Strong! Clever.. finished superbly..this captures a moment..well thought out..

[HorrorMaster]

An outstanding poem.

[Frifthor (D^2)]

I've put off reviewing this poem for a while, because I felt that I had to be in the right frame of mind. Your poem is short, but so is that moment between life and death. I felt it ended wonderfully abruptly, an ending that fit perfectly into your subject. Your rhyming worked well here as well, not the generic love-dove type of rhymes. Excellent work.

[Randolf Ramos]

Yes! the way that some people are sensitive! that they let the negative scavenge their whole being is very detrimental to self! It is considered a self suicide!
But the moment that we learn to be strong! we will rise and never fall on our knees, considering choosing the right choices.

[FlawedByDesign]

I like the shortness of the poem and the rhyming couplets.

I felt like the line "Release is my options no room to expand," was disconnected from the first line. it made it seem like it was there just for the sake of the rhyme.