Limbo

I change my chant to an enlightend tone,

You see the smile, you are welcomed home,

 

I greet you near this delightful view,

Situational embrace of solid truths,

 

Happy to see you the delight is mine,

I'm shocked in aw when you walk right by,

 

I turn around and the picture is clear,

I'm still gone and your still not here..

Reviews

[TeenRomance2]

Very good poem. Your talent really shows through in this one.

[Bard Constantine]

Enjoyed the twist at the end... cleverly written. One small thing -the word is spelled 'awe' in the 6th line. Otherwise, a most enjoyable read...

[A.Lee]

Wow... In agreement with the others, I love the "shock" of the ending. You carried us through so beautifully and then left us standing there like "wait, what?" Excellent job on that. Great work.

[Natalie]

lots od depths in this poem. I loved it. :D
"I turn around and the picture is clear,
I'm still gone and your still not here.."
Loved the end. Very powerful :D

[Michael Wootton]

it was good how you fitted such a great deal of a story into such a short poem. and i like how it was snappy and easy to follow. well done i say :)

[HorrorMaster]

Very good poem

[Aleah]

Well written

[Emily Quinn]

I love this poem, Throughout I had a smile on my face thinking this was going to be a happy poem where two people ruinite whatever the relationship between them happenes to be, then when I reached the endng I couldn't help but feel the "awe" sensation hit me. I'm pretty sure I gasped. It's so sad, and you created a perfect balance of emotion. Wonderful choice of words to bring this story to life in such few stanzas and a great flow

[Ladysue]

I like this a lot. The ending is great...good writing...

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked this poem. I think the ending is good too. Good job on this 100/100
Thanks for sharing. :)