Thank You Dad

My back sore from the ripped flesh just torn,

My face in the corner, tears drop as I mourn,

 

I fear that the same will go next to my brother,

Though I know through my actions he'll be saved by my mother,

 

I fall to my knees he yells back unclear words,

Telling me still all the things i deserved,

 

Hate it or love it this is the way I protect,

He takes from my inocence through pain and neglect,

 

But at least my families safe from what he could do,

I take all the hits to keep the evil from you...

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A poem with a sad story. No-one should accept abuse. Your words are strong. A brave young person would take the abuse for a mother and a brother. A powerful poem.
Coyote

[deeps]

Such a powerful write, so full of emotion.

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Very strong, packed full of emotions, especially pain. A very sad poem, but a very good one... Well done dude.

[FlawedByDesign]

This has a very sad and powerful message. It has metaphorically inscribed itself into my skin, making me relive the pain you have suffered.
The title is very simple, but of a twisted kind. To be thankful in this case is almost incomprehensible and it shows what a sacrifice you've made to save your family.

Bravo!

[KL]

Strong message... sometimes it's a little less painful to deal with it yourself than to watch others go through the same.

[Shin]

I like how it ends:

"But at least my families safe from what he could do,
I take all the hits to keep the evil from you..."

The reader can really feel everything behind this. All in all, it was good, I really liked it. Congrats.

[KaySea]

wow. very emotional

[TeenRomance2]

Omg What a powerful poem. It's raw, brutally honest, and full of harsh reality. I like the last few verses. Very strong stuff.

[Leah Everett]

oh my god, this was great, domestic violence the root of a painful home. its written so well, its as if from experiance.
i hope every victim of domestic violence recovers from it and seeks support. :/
well done, keep writing (: x

[Dream Weaver]

Well done my good man, very sad
subject. I could feel the pain and
disappointment...