The Last Breath

The taste, misplaced, not one for me to waste,

The glory the grace, no need to be defaced,

Its time, our prime, a gift of all mankind,

The fear of whats near, not mine to decline,

No wait! my fate, something none should take,

But still, the deal, left me no appeal,

Your hope, uncloaked, please do not revoke,

Restate, untaint, my emotions left as blank,

Regret, respect, hope god is then whats next,

The line, declines, the flat is near its time,

I pray, please stay,

Your tears touch my skin as my last breath slips away........

Reviews

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

the interlacing of words to evoke emotions are placed with delicate care and thoughtfulness~ here there is the fate line traveling a human happenstance opening like a dark rose from such sadness~

[Dinesh Sairam]

The first thought that hit me after the end was the titled had very less to do with the content. Titles play a great role, be careful while choosing them.

As for the poem, it's yet another fair write from you :) Some words very poetic (defaced, uncloacked, untaint) whilst some are so common (deal, appeal).

Very minor punctuation glitches here and there.

The last line was stunning. My favorite line of the poem.

Well, as I feel now, every poet has a 'Turning point' and this poem is yours :)

Keep writing.