Greed

I sit amongst a million men,

I hold myself to not one sin,

I think of me and call for help,

To get myself all you've dealt,

Apreciate not what i get,

But instead i get upset,

The next i want is the thing i need,

I want it all unfullfilled.. my greed.

Reviews

[dreamer :)]

This is really good. I like it a lot. :) Nice!

[Franklin...]

Short and to the point, and it makes the point so very well.

[Pikachu]

yeah greed and ignorance is one of our biggest problems today we are never satisfied with what we have

[.]

a deadly sin, no doubt, we live in a world motivated by greed. sadly. poignant read.

[HorrorMaster]

Amazing poem

[Liza]

insightful way to express greed
the wanting of what we do not have instead of the wanting of what we do have

[JenLyn]

Nice write, loved the flow, keep it up! :)

[Iota]

I have met people like this, i love the line the next i want is the thing i need because greedy people always forget that it is a huge difference between a want and need and they confuse their wants for needs. Oh I am glad I no longer know people like this. Great write.

[Dinesh Sairam]

For these few lines, I read it thrice to understand fully. I quite didn't get "To get myself all you've dealt". And avoid using the same word twice in a poem (Apart from prepositions and articles of course.) and that too, in the immediately next line. The last two lines were a perfect ending to this nice poem. I couldn't help wishing you could've use more words, imagination and made the poem all the more potent. Anyways, it's nice as it is and Keep writing :)

PS. I don't know if you're one of those people who hate forms and meters. But I seriously recommend them. Always try to use a form or meter, it makes the poem better. And with meters, even a poem with fewer imagery seems like a master piece. :)

[A.Lee]

Actually I think it is rather complete. Its just one of those poems that you read slowly or read twice to grasp the full of it because each line (or pair of lines) has a meaning to it. I like it. Nice work.