Virtual

 

When we got together the actions became a ritual,

Connect in every way mental physical and virtual,

We laughed together but my feelings never strengthened,

Time use to fly by now a days it seems to lengthen,

Every single day she tells me how much she loves me,

I smile back at her and tell her she looks lovely,

Spending time together it’s alright for a while,

But after all the conversation her voice becomes a little vile,

Like the screech from a chalkboard......

I like her a little but her love seems to be ensured,

I can feel the pain seeping through the arteries,

Its losing the energy like a cheap line battery,

She asks me why I can't give her one more chance,

And I reply with words that destroy her stance,

And she tells me every day I come up in her thoughts,

She's thinking to herself if I realize what I've got.....

 

Reviews

[miSS LEaf]

an interesting story you've told us here.. i have to agree with all of your previous reviews.. enjoyed :) ~L

[Dream Weaver]

Not a bad job, an interesting take
on a relationship that's gone astray.
The flow was good. I enjoyed the
read.

[Charles]

I like the rhythm of the work and there are some good analogies. The spelling errors are a bit distracting, but overall the message outweighs this defect. A little polish would push this poem far. :-)

[HorrorMaster]

Very good poem

[Coyote Poetry]

You are very wise in this poem. Sometime we must listen to the whisper in the back of the mind. A dangerous person is near. Friendship is Ok. I like the story and the ending. A outstanding poem. Always listen to your instinct.
Coyote

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

God! This is one of the worst situations to find yourself in. I think what's even worse is to have never had an intimate relationship with someone and find that it's impossible to just be friends because the other person is always wanting more. How can you be friends with someone who always wants more? It's impossible. You don't want to hurt the other person so you don't say anything, which only hurts him/her worse in the end.

[Leanne Conway]

I like it. Awesome write!

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"I like her a little but her love seems to be ensured,
I can feel the pain seeping through the arteries,
Its losing the energy like a cheap line batterie,"

(Hell Yeah--this reads very smoothly my friend--great poem}

james:-)

[Nina Kari]

Great flow, a few spelling errors or maybe you did it on purpose if so then ok, I get it VERY good. Keep writing! :)