Your Eyes

It's a poem i'm writing for my book.

Your Eyes

Your eyes,

Amazing like the night.

 

Lovely and shy

Washes inside.

 

Dive into a pool of you.

Start to love you.

 

Saying,

Sweet thing, so loving.

 

Ponderous, intelligent.

You're the reason why I live.

 

You are,

Beautiful as can be.

 

Love me, love you.

I’m no good for you.

 

Your eyes,

More beautiful than anything.

 

I love you,

And your eyes say you love too,

 

But who?

Author's Note

What do you think?

Reviews

[fred...]

Love me, love you.

I'm no good for you.


love these lines.

[Jess Cook]

i lvoe the simpleness of it. it's impacting.

[John McGrael]

i like the last line a lot!!

and i really like the whole poem, reminds me of one poem i wrote a while back, but i didnt have a twist ending type thing

[uber-bubble]

love the whole tone of this piece, very beautiful

[you just never know]

nice write. interesting and thought-provoking.

[Starting Over]

very beautiful! loved it! thanks for sharing!

[just is]

Simply beautiful, This is wonderful well written, to the point

[Laura Nikkinen]

i like the shortness of the sentences, punchy at times, and like... a question and statement put together. what kinda book you writing?