Incident that happened

Incident that happened.

She hurried and went through her purse. Not so costly but her necklace was just enough to raise the funds. Few paces away at the square, she had been able to sell the necklace for coins. Now she extracted all the coins and after counting that followed handed them over to the shopkeeper. After few minutes that passed she had been able to accelerate her steps to catch the bus. She was content and there was a triumph written all over her face.

                He had waited for this moment whole month. His hard work and night shifts at the factory had got him extra bucks that he was able to add to the balance he had received after selling his guitar. It was but very dear to him but he had to do it.

                They greeted each other like never before in past one year. It was the day they had marked as their anniversary for the first time they met. Without words to follow both exchanged gifts and he could not lift his eyes from her and kept staring. Finally on her insistence, both went through formally and opened their respective gifts. 

                He looked at the strings brought for his Guitar.

                She looked at the beautiful pendant for her necklace.

                Both laughed.  

 

Author's Note

Just recalling an incident that happened with a friend.

Reviews

[Troy Adamson]

I agree with Steven's review; the plot strongly follows Gift of the Magi. I'd like to see this story expanded a bit more. Perhaps detail a bit more of each person's day, and some of the myriad of feelings they have building up to the moment they share.

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Troy for your valuable input. Will try to work on your suggestions.

[Valentine]

I love the idea of this, they both knew what the other would have wanted. Valentine

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Valentine for the review! Only when Steven pointed out I went through O Henry's work and realized that the plot was similiar to his work.

[Devanshi]

The story was good and had a few grammatical errors here and there. And I agree with Troy and would've liked to see the story expanded jusssst a little bit more. It got over so fast, I had to read it again to make sure I didn't skip anything! But besides that I liked it. The first paragraph was nicely written and loved the line–"there was a triumph written all over her face.". (the "a" before triumph is not needed. :). So yeah, that was pretty good. Work a bit more on improving some tiny but important parts of your english. 😊

[tanmay7551]

Thanks for the review. And yes, While I improve I will try to refrain from editing this piece. If I do corrections, I will again publish the same as a different piece.

In that way I would like to preserve all the reviewer's contribution towards my rising :)

[Devanshi]

Ok, sure!
"I would like to preserve all the reviewer's contribution towards my rising :)"––Of course!!

[Steven Hunley]

Good job, I suspect English isn't your mother tongue.
Read Gift or the Magi by O Henry. Similar plot. First story I've read here and not disappointing. Try "never before' or "in the past year," and check for grammar.

[tanmay7551]

Thanks steven, appreciate your review. Correct, English isn't my mother tongue. I will for sure read the books you suggested. Your reviews will surely help me in improving my writing and will motivate not to give up.