I will survive!

Man evolved and survived through difficult times from the beginning. Internal feelings though make us weak at times. Betrayal in love is one of kind but one should surive the onslaught and not care!

You left me alone under bright moonlight,

I was weeping and pleading whole night.

Do you think I will crumble and feelings forever will be warm?

I will survive without you, there is no harm.

Of all the love I had nurtured for you,

You didn’t care for a moment and I had no clue.

Is there no tomorrow or will I not be loved ever by anyone?

I will survive without you, you are not the one.

You made me feel like I am ‘Miss nobody’,

And break my heart to run away with somebody.

Do you think I will be withered and dead on the reddened shore?

I will survive without you, there is everything in you to ignore.

Last days of our love now feel like hell,

I had tolerated all abuse now it rings the bell.

Do you think I will be bewitched and feel so weak?

I will survive without you; I will rise to reach the peak.

Author's Note

I was just going through many of the poems on writerscafe and found a pice from one of my friend. It was a poem where a girl was heartbroken and trying to self destruct longing for death. Made me write this one as a reply and hope it inspires the girl to survive.

Reviews

[Diamond]

Stunning!! I admire the concept behind this poem. I am glad I read it. Yes, some relationships are like magic spell. And one needs to invest brains to take care of themselves. I loved these lines.

"Do you think I will be bewitched and feel so weak?
I will survive without you; I will rise to reach the peak."

[tanmay7551]

Thanks so much, I am glad that you liked it and the idea behind... Inspiring for me!

[Diamond]

You are welcome and keep writing.

[Miss Sharon]

(I will survive without you; I will rise to reach the peak.) A beautifully strong and positive closure to an amazing write! ~Sharon

[tanmay7551]

Thanka a ton for your review! It keeps people like me motivated to progress and do better.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

This is excellent and empowering. "There is everything in you to ignore." Such a great line. Thank you so much for sharing!!

[tanmay7551]

Thank you so much dear Friend.

I am glad that you liked it.

[Swati Nayak]

wonderful poem with a message......
loved the tone and the rhyme
your poem made me feel as the girl was REALLY speaking to me..so real and these lines


Do you think I will be bewitched and feel so weak?

I will survive without you; I will rise to reach the peak.

are inspiring

[tanmay7551]

Your words are more inspiring than my poetry. Thanks so much Swati for these motivating words and I am glad that you liked it.

[Valentine]

One sure thing, life goes on for the one left behind. People lose someone every day be it a family member or a friend. All one can do is pick up the pieces and move on. Valentine

[tanmay7551]

Ture, life must go on and we should move on and gather pieces around.

Thanks for the review.

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Powerful message, well written. Starz

[tanmay7551]

If you think so, I am very happy. Thanks, Starz.

[Devanshi]

Amazing poem!! Again the words rhyme beautifully and the message conveyed here is really true. The poem kept me thinking for a while and also there were no interrupting sentences in between like the ones in some other poems on this site, the poem flowed smoothly and I think the rhyming words at the end of each sentence did the trick!! Someone shouldn't break down if they lose someone who didn't car for you!! That sentence comes out in each of the paragraphs, which is really good. Great work, I liked it!!

[tanmay7551]

Thanks so much. True, one shouldn't break down for someone who didn't care for you. Your review means a lot for this piece!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is a strong piece! One should know that the world doesn't end if a person leaves.. Life goes on.. You conveyed the message beautifully..

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Yumnakay for your valuable review!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome ☺

[Ted Kniffen]

Well written. Takes me back to Gloria Gaynor's song of the same name. Hope your friend will be all right.

[tanmay7551]

Yes, you are right. Gloria Gaynor's and I think another version from Cake.

Ted, yes she should be all right, just that her sadness comes out in the form of creativity (Poetry) and I made an attempt to counter attack to provide her strength.

[Tom]

Love unrequited can have negative recriminations, especially when deception is a contributing factor, though the pain will pass especially with a positive and confident outlook!

A wonderful scribed, free flowing poem, hope springs eternal with optimism!

[tanmay7551]

Thanks Tom for stopping by. Your words again have a peculiar space of their own.