Song of Liberty

I cannot define, whether this lines fall appropriately in the structured form of Poetry ... rather this can be expressions .... feelings ..

 

This unraveled earth …

                         Craving for serenity!

Needs to get filtered like a water purifier …

         

         In the quest of fountain fresh streams

                        - Of divine thoughts of freedom...

       

       To restore those shattered dreams …

                         We fervently cherished …

                                 To give a worry-free sleep for the destitute

                   To bring back, the ardent trust

                                             Through loveless lovers

                             

                     To let the itinerant winter nightingale

                       Fly with wings of desire

                                                    Towards the beaming light of spring!

          

 To let the Albatross guide

                              The lost sailor to see the long treasured shore …    

                To let the Hope Train show us hope once again…

                         … Through the eyes of dreamless, sleepless

                                    Romantic drifters

 

To let the Liberty Bell ring her sanctified chorus..

                          Across the seven seas to the thirteen rivers

 

 

Cause, Mother Earth knows - at the end…

              Her poignant,

                           Bohemian & rustic children are the

                               Ultimate Candle of hope  

                 

                  Not the ones, born with silver spoons!

 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Beautiful and, deeply felt.

What we love we protect, what we hate we destroy. I guess Man hates his Mother Earth with her seas and rivers, creatures fourlegged and otherwise.

Tragic, yes?

We live for today, in many ways we don't even think of today's children's futures, we assume things will stay as they are, that what we do is fine, it doesn't matter..

You and I know it does, just as your other reviewers do... they care. Maybe through wc.org. we can spread the word.. maybe we can be a writing river trickling love for our world and concern through words.

Sorry, sorry, soapbox.

Your post is unusually constructed, looks fine and is so easy to read. Your phrases flow, and, have a reverence.

' This unraveled earth �

Craving for serenity!

Needs to get filtered like a water purifier �

In the quest of fountain fresh streams

- Of divine thoughts of freedom...'
and more :

' Cause, Mother Earth knows - at the end�

Her poignant,

Bohemian & rustic children are the

Ultimate Candle of hope

Not the ones, born with silver spoons! '


Actually there ARE people in all walks of life who care.. it's the silver spoon attitude from any group that offends.

Will stop. Your post is incredibly thought provoking... thank you.







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[O!]

Great imagery and makes u think!

Thank you for joining the contest.

x,
O!

[Chaos Stone]

great words
even though i disagree with your point, to a degree
poor people can be just as greedy and consumptive as people with means, but people born with silver spoons are more likely to expect things from the world without consequence and no thought to give back or replace what they take
but really, great words, great phrases, great thought
i couldnt begin to write something like this

[Frank Terino]

This poem is very well written and expressed, I like the form design and imagery, great job!

[Angel Baby]

Incredibly thought provoking poem. Very vivid images and I liked the flow you created. Found I truly enjoyed reading it. Thank you!

[Michael X]

in my opinion, Wow! awsome, I sincerely think this is depthful, and insightful.
and really draws the reader to another place and time. Excellent job.

[M Bester]

I think poetry should be written how you feel comfortable with.
I sometimes wish this was true - "To restore those shattered dreams � We fervently cherished �"
Keep writing is all I can say.

[Dani California]

The hippies... bohemians ... lovers of earth... lovers of spirit... the people in touch with hope, faith, love... who long for the true meaning of ONE LOVE to prevail.

Yes, it is they who keep the flame lit.

Wonderful piece!! Truly...

[Lyrical Love]

Cause, Mother Earth knows - at the end�
Her poignant,
Bohemian & rustic children are the
Ultimate Candle of hope
Not the ones, born with silver spoons!
Great poetic thoughts...that touch on subjects that need to be important to all.

[Wildfleour]

If you would like critique let me know. Otherwise I will leave my comment as saying that you created some very vivid images and I liked the flow/structure you created.