In the Grass

Form free.

 

 

 

Through this silence,

Between you and me,

Slithers in passion

Disguised as a friend

A sweet whisper

In my ear

A hand on my cheek

Your arm,

Coiled around my waist

I think...

I found forever,

Right here,

In your embrace.

 

My body,

Falls in love with the security

Ever so sinuously

Lust begins to swell.

The constricting,

Undulating sensations 

Take their hold

I am rendered helpless.

 

In my chest

Growls a pounding ache

My lips

Have this peculiar tingle.

 And I can't tell

In my final waking thought

Is this infatuation

     ...or suffocation?

 

Author's Note

The title is going to change probably... I just had this idea. Suggestion are welcome as always.

Reviews

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Oooo! I like this! I've definitely felt this way in my life and I'm sure many others can relate. I love reading work that I can relate to.

I like the way the shortness of the lines really hit you harder than something that might go into a ton of detail! That's a great accomplishment for a writer. Great job! :)

[pal]

Beautifully written poem. Bravo

[Emily B]

The only thing missing is an apple :)

I loved this.

[Ivory]

Is this infatuation

...or suffocation?

Excellent ending, wasn't really expecting it, but perfect!!
Excellent write ; )

[Adela Muresan]

Oh�nice.
Great presentation of the love-butterflies syndrome.
Sends shivers down my spine - ****Poem.

A.M.

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like your poem very much. Just one criticism: "Between you and I" needs to be changed to the correct "Between you and me."

Sal

[Brianna Brie]

Sweet Embrace...just a title thought.

I like the way you tell an age old story of friendship developing into something more. Well done!

I think
I found forever,
Right here,
In your embrace

[Jet Lag]

as ever, clever. tamme sure knows hidden forbidden passion. :)

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A nice write Tamme. It reads to me like you have a good friend and its will something or not happen? Can it all be real? questions you ask yourself....an nice piece!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Great ending - how true in such moments of passion, delight and ardor how difficult it is to tell in which direction we should go. Well expressed. Nice format. Succinct and telling. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Ari]

I really enjoyed this. It is something that we've all felt. Great work!