Darkest Space

I met your ghost

When I thought I was lost in space

Your sight ripped a hole through my soul

I thought you were gone

 

I was alone

On the darkest side of the moon

 

My anger flared

And I think I might have

For a second grew strong

A fire was lit

A power I never felt before

 

The sight amused me

Your memory was launched

From that black abyss

 

Out into the universe

With a sonic boom

Blinding flash

 

 

Someone asked

Are you really gone?

I nodded with confidence

But feeling apprehensive

 

'Cause I know

It’s you

That always finds a home

When I am trying not to look

 

Back in that corner

That is so very dark

In my mind

 

You’re the part of me

I refuse to acknowledge

Reviews

[Jet Lag]

--love this:
That will sneak in
When I am trying not to look

do you want to change the That to You, since you are personifying?

--love this:
When I thought I was lost in space
Your sight ripped a hole
--and this:
I thought I was alone
On the darkest side of the moon

i like the darkest space title.

[Jaclyn]

No, I think this title is just fine.

I'm so happy that tonight is a night of great reads. This is gorgeous, mystical, twisted, confident....love it. I don't really want to say anything else and ruin the mood I'm in after reading this. :)

[Jacqueline]

It reads like your inner self was trying to come out and be acknowledged. I'm probably *way* off track, but I see it as a talk you had with yourself; as if your 'other' self was standing in front of you. Either which way, it was an entertaining read and gave us readers a glimpse of what's deep inside you. Like others, I like this title instead of "Sonic Boom."

[G D Howard]

I like it and read it because of the title! Sonic Bomb I would have ignored, but if you don't like the current title "Gone" would be quite suitable.

[Emily B]

Dark Corner of my Mind. . .? I've got a headache so that may not be a suitable title either. Cosmic and vast you've gained your freedom. Only you realize that there will always be that little niggling of doubt. This is a wonderful write.

[Rain]

I read, and wondered while I read..was this a real person ? Perhaps a lost love finally let go, only to come back and work his image back to where it had been forgotten. Then, I try not to delve to deep into meanings of dreams, or writers intent. I read, and hope I feel something after I'm done. I did. I felt something
mystical because of your last line. There's more than just a dream here...perhaps. I love it. Rain..

[Tania Leigh]

Tamme, this is deep, deep, deep.....awesome!

Our dreams just never forget, do they?

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

great work. I love the flow of this.

[Robert Luna]

I love the idea of the ones we lose are never gone as they are always a part of us and will always be so as long as we remember and think about them. I love the feeling that his left me with the fact that we are all connected in a way and well forever be so. Very Powerful stated.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Dreams are often elusive but you have managed to write this very well. I agree that there are those parts of us we wish weren't real or apparent - you have expressed this very well here. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha