Places...

Places...
             Places...
                          Places...
But no where to go-
             -Where? I don't know.

Dreaming...
                  Dreaming...
                                    Dreaming...
But this is a nightmare for me-
                   -Mentally blind but my eyes can see.

Wishes...
              Wishes...
                            Wishes...
But I know they never come true-
               -Or I would be somewhere with you.

Stop...
          Stop...
                    Stop...
But it never will-
           -Forever this space to fill

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

Very different style of writing than I ma use to seeing which made it even more enjoyable. I loved the way you laid it out and the way the words flowed. It has a very interesting thought provoking quality about it and made me stop for a moment and really reread it again as I could see it relating to so many things in life itself and as a person.


Well Done!!!!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

i like how you repeat the first word of each stanza.. it make the poem more to me surrealistic half between
being awake and being asleep..forever this space to fill is a nice line.
Good peom.

Chloe
xoxo

[Kara Hadley]

this is great. you never really see poetry like this, but i liked it. the last two lines seemed a tad off, though. they just didn't seem to fit the flow. i don't know how to change them, though.
good work!

[S. P. Vaporis]

this is wonderful and highly creative. nicely presented and well said. bravo! ~peace~

[Gypsy]

This is a very appealing piece to me. I like the way it is structured as well as the emotions behind the words. Wonderful job!

[Emily B]

This is fun and different! I enjoyed it.

[Rain]

WOW!!
I've never seen that form of poem. Very unique and intriquing. Fun to read. Rain

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I love the way you have done the layout....very imaginative. I love this a lot...:)

[Amor-de-angel]

I liked the layout. Well thought out. Good writing

[Sean M. Addams]

very unique ... love the style of this one.. good work on this!!