Numb

I once dreamt of candles shining through your eyes,

I followed the echo of shrieking cries.

There was the ghost looking for the things never found

Next to the wilting flower who loved to hug the ground.

 

I whispered my secrets to the fuzzy bunny

Who laughed his a*s off like life was funny

 

The drums would begin to beat like crazy

Quickening my heart, then things became hazy

 

All the while the venomous melody played,
Fear pounded as my memory began to fade.

 

 

Nobody mentioned how I had been blown away

It tends to happen to those who chose to stay

 

Maybe that's when I found my shame
What was once fun was never a game.

 

In the snow, I laid accepting that moment as my last

Shivering and alone, the storm ended, clouds passed

 

For the first time, I genuinely looked at the sky,

I found it to be where my dreams truly lie.

 

I thank the stars for guiding my desire
Igniting my candles, I began to feel my fire.

 

You may come and go, I may even go and come

But never again will I be left completely numb...

 

 

 

Author's Note

I had posted this before all the writing was lost. I had to reconstruct from my notes so it's not the exact same.

Reviews

[Jet Lag]

like the strength from the last line!

[Jaclyn]

I have no idea what exactly this was about, but I liked it anyway. Hehehehe...I too enjoyed the imagery. A little Alice in Wonderland-y. :)

[Tania Leigh]

Very deep....to me, it's a soul-searching journey in which the speaker is initially fearful to the point of mania, but eventually finds her way and realizes that for too long she had been living for another.....and now it's time for her to live her own life.

Am I close?

[Nana Carmine]

This does seem like it would be fun to write. It follows it's own little train of though which is highly amusing. You did a really good job with this. I loved some of the randomness.

~Nana Carmine

[Beth]

Yes, this would be fun to write. I do like how once the writer has explored other options, he/she turns inward and creates their own fire. :)

[Robert Luna]

Stunning piece of writing here. The way you captured this was perfectly breathtaking. I love the flow and images that this so carelessly laid into my head. I liked the fact it stirred a deep thought with i myself and what a joy it was to read.


Well Done!!!!!

[Rain]

You did a great job, too. Lots of images, and also a statement of your inner strength. Great write. Rain

[Ivory]

I enjoyed reading this.
Very creative and give the reading a lot to reflect on. Good write : )

[Diana Owen Busy with Li..]

simply wonderful... and as you might know, I love ryhms...This was a great write

[Amor-de-angel]

This made me smile..
I whispered my secret to the fuzzy bunny,
Who laughed his a*s off like life was funny.

I like the seroius parts too,a good combination between the two.