The Sirens

Believe in the confidence that wills itself to take on desire
And all might be fine
But, allowing a moment to slip by,

Waiting for something better
Might just leave the soul hungry

Without knowing why

This ravenous soul hesitates when it should run
And sleeps when it should seek out the world
The sorrowful character wanders aimlessly
Or worse...
Led to the darkest valleys of the tallest mountains
Quickly, the memory of radiant sunrises become lost
With the serenity of the sun melting into the horizon.


Lost and famished
Beyond recovery

Death has come to resemble an ally.
But this soul is addicted to the soaking sound of desperation in the air
Singing songs that the spirit adores,
The tone, pitch, melody all perfect,
Tethered to my heart

So on the song plays
With my scampering soul
Desiring to believe in my confidence
And I might be fine.

 

Reviews

[Robert Luna]

I love the idea of Sirens and the power of their enchanting song that has been responsible for leading so many sailor to their death. Over all I really loved the way you did this piece and the way it flowed so great. The imagery was wonderful and really easily seeped into my mind. Very enjoyable read and great story.



Wonderful Job!!!!

[Amor-de-angel]

I think you have done a good job so far, if your not happy with it give it a day or two then come back to it

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Regarding your note - it is always a good idea to let things lie for a bit then come back and revisit what you have written. You know best want you want to describe. It does end abruptly but the description and imagery is very powerful. Nice write. Thank you for sharing.
Light,
Siddartha

[Jaclyn]

Oh, no, the ending ties in very nicely with the beginning. This is beautiful, lyrical, and while it has an air of melancholy, somehow it is refreshing as well. It made me feel calm and at peace. You have a great flow to your work. Excellent!

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

Well I do know that if we believe in ourselves we will walk our own path and not be lead distractions.
Then I remember to believe in myself,
Let confidence carry me down the right path.
But it is your piece, it is a suggestion. Nicely Done.
Debby

[Emily B]

I like what you have so far. Usually when you're stuck, a good night's sleep will do wonders. Let me know when you get it where you want it to be, I'd like to read it again.