Pain Piercing

Pierced into my heart

That yank it into bits

It cleave me like a fig

Impaled in apex of thy heart

I was shrouded into pain

I was shattered into fragments

Sorrowful tears it rain

Laceration into segments

Reviews

[Dave]

Love lost and the pain continues on! Nicely done! I wish I could assure you that eventually it ceases, but alas, I can't. It eases, somewhat, but I've found that it doesn't end.

[JT Godin]

Not bad. Very visceral, and making the link to visceral pain (or the physical), and pain of loves lost (emotional)... Imagery choice is quite good.

[Davidgeo]

This is good.

You say very little... but, it's f*****g visceral.

Damn it, I really wasn't trying to rhyme.

Fine poem however, I'm glad to have stumbled upon it.

[Tom]

Thank you....