The way it was for me

The floor opened up in front of your feet and all life just seemed to fall in

I couldn’t stand it to just sit and watch and that’s where most my memories begin

Thought I could help you so I stretched across and I tried to make you a bridge

I reached out with my passion and used all I had and managed to grab on to the ridge

As you stepped across there was something between us and I managed to hold on to my grip

But the further you went the harder it got and my feet slowly began to slip.

 

And I held on so tight that my mind was not right until you got to the other side

I knew I couldn’t make it and that we would break it but I thought I could handle the ride

Realised I hadn’t planned for you to step on my hand and I lost it as I fell away

I crashed all the way down and I thought I might drown but that’s not how I feel today

The worst of it all was that after the fall you walked off and didn’t look back

You just kept on moving as someone else took your hand and helped you move on down the track

 

So you must understand that as he took your hand while I started my climb to the top

I felt so forsaken and was seriously shaken that you could let me so easily drop

My pain turned to rage as I climbed from my cage from where I could see you every day

I slipped as I climbed and I fumbled for a time as I watched the two of you walk away

But the anger I had was nothing but bad for the both of us I now realise

So I just let it go and I thought you should know that every day some of it dies

 

And maybe some day when its all gone away there’ll be friendship between you and me

Of course maybe there won’t with our separate lives but I guess we’ll just have to see

But the reason I wrote this was to stop all the hurt and the anger and guilt and the pain

To just let go of it with a long and deep breath and start being myself again

To find out what I was and what I can be as I brush down and get back on the ride

And to let you be free without hassle from me and be happy whoever you’re beside.

Reviews

[Flow~]

often we try to help those we love not realizing they are stuck in a cycle of being a victim. The more we help, the more we fall down the rabbit hole with them and as you said, they often heal enough to walk away with someone else who will have to rescue them once again on another day. wonderful write~

[Adam Jordan Turner]

This was the first poem I read on writerscafe and I have to say I was very glad it was. It was not only the first I read but it was also my first favorite and is still my favorite so far. This piece is absolutely moving. So much honesty, so much vulnerability, and so much feeling. I really admire your work. Thank you for sharing you talents! I think you and I may have similar styles, If you view any of mine you should start on page two with the earliest.

[L.G. Knight]

An amazing write thanks for entering it into the contest.... I am reading as fast as I can and will have finallists soon!

~Frances~

[O!]

OOOOOOOOOOOO...........this was so very sad.......and written just soooooooo very well.....very unique rhyme.......i loved it!!......I love the piece and how uve written it but not the hurt........

my heart felt so heavy reading this......i see ur eyes looking their way and somehow ur one arm outstretched asking for help.....

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going to my faves!!

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[Mandy]

It's hard to watch someone you love be with sombody else..
I really liked the ryme sequence here! Unique, never heard it before.
Especially liked this one =]

[Damien Dsoul]

The narration is taut and intresting, with each verse giving a fresh colour of beauty to the work's brilliant imagery. The tone sad but sombre; the poem is rift with symbolism so powerful it does go much further grabbing any reader in its grasp.